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01:25 - "our place" sounds weird. maybe something more like "our school"? I dunno
02:23 - I think there should be a comma after "here"?
02:48 - "is" -> "are"
03:20 - Comma needed after "miss you"
03:53 - I think bento should be translated. >_>
04:14 - The "huh?" starts early... move it away from the scene change.
05:29 - Fade it!
(Her dad is a tree? lolwut? I already read a book series where someone turned into a tree... and another series where a girl talks to trees... lawl)
06:57 - Add a bit more lead out
07:32 - "By" -> "Before"? The current line sounds awkward
~07:35 - You're missing the father's response
10:27 - fade
12:23 - "They're" -> "It's"
12:26 - get rid of the "from"
13:45 - fade
15:38 - I think Lunar timing would work best here... or at least add an ellipse in there.
19:17 - That line cut off WAY too early
20:22 - Uhhhhhhh forget to sub a part here?
Le Note: Styling looks fine. I don't much care for the "i" character, but meh, whatever.
AND OMG THE BGM IN THIS IS AMAZING ;__; WANT OST [b]NOW[/b]